I made a commercial/ad

Ilovebigcats · Postby **Ilovebigcats** » November 28th, 2008, 12:43 pm

Tell me what you think....
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Be nice... I happen to love it!

EagerBeaver · Postby **EagerBeaver** » November 28th, 2008, 1:02 pm

I like it. To make it truer to Star Wars, slow down the text to about half the speed it is at now and it will also serve to build more anticipation.

Love the premise of it. Star Wars references get a thumbs up in my book.

rough_rider · Postby **rough_rider** » November 28th, 2008, 1:49 pm

Nice job Wen :goodjob:

jessicacook · Postby **jessicacook** » November 28th, 2008, 1:55 pm

I Like it too! It's really neat!! I think you should slow the text down too. But it's great!! Great job!

PastorDaniel · Postby **PastorDaniel** » November 28th, 2008, 2:28 pm

EagerBeaver wrote:I like it. To make it truer to Star Wars, slow down the text to about half the speed it is at now and it will also serve to build more anticipation.

Love the premise of it. Star Wars references get a thumbs up in my book.

I agree...very awesome...however...slow the text down a bit...you are showing it to "men"...

Ilovebigcats · Postby **Ilovebigcats** » November 28th, 2008, 10:04 pm

Okay... I tweaked it. How about now???

Link!!!!

Dr. Ron · Postby **Dr. Ron** » November 29th, 2008, 5:51 am

I like it very much.....

JohnDB · Postby **JohnDB** » November 29th, 2008, 6:10 am

It looks great...

But I would make the text even slower...to make it look more like the original Star Wars...

But it could just be this cheap computer too....

It was tough to read it all as it moved...

c u there · Postby **c u there** » November 29th, 2008, 8:47 am

I agree looks and sounds great very professional feel. I am also having a hard time reading it that fast, maybe even about half the speed would be better.

one love · Postby **one love** » November 29th, 2008, 9:38 am

looks great wendy :wink:

crispfin · Postby **crispfin** » November 29th, 2008, 9:46 am

I've seen better. :shock:

J/K!

It looks good, but I'd slow the text down more.

Ilovebigcats · Postby **Ilovebigcats** » November 29th, 2008, 11:23 am

Is it because it is too fast or because it is too wordy???

Barkey and I did it together. He is coming over tonight to help me slow it down more.

EagerBeaver · Postby **EagerBeaver** » November 29th, 2008, 11:30 am

Ilovebigcats wrote:Is it because it is too fast or because it is too wordy???

Barkey and I did it together. He is coming over tonight to help me slow it down more.

It's just because it's too fast. Otherwise it is absolutely awesome.

Oh and please beat Barkey in fantasy football for me this weeekend and cement my playoff spot!

Ilovebigcats · Postby **Ilovebigcats** » November 29th, 2008, 11:34 am

EagerBeaver wrote:
Ilovebigcats wrote:Is it because it is too fast or because it is too wordy???

Barkey and I did it together. He is coming over tonight to help me slow it down more.

It's just because it's too fast. Otherwise it is absolutely awesome.

Oh and please beat Barkey in fantasy football for me this weeekend and cement my playoff spot!

Thank you! I LOVE it. We are currently planning our next spoof commercial. Any other good ideas?

I soooooo totally need to beat Barkey!!! UGH! It is making me a nervous wreck! He is coming over to watch football with us. I might punch him out and change his team around. haha.

JohnDB · Postby **JohnDB** » November 29th, 2008, 11:41 am

Ilovebigcats wrote:Is it because it is too fast or because it is too wordy???

Barkey and I did it together. He is coming over tonight to help me slow it down more.

I really woudn't change any of the wording...that is perfect.
The problem lies in your audience...they will have trouble reading it when they don't know what it is saying plus the words are moving all at the same time...they will have trouble seeing, reading...cause they usually won't wear their needed glasses and or they don't read much period...so...there will be plenty of poor readers in the audience.

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